Hey everyone. I'd like to get some feedback on my latest RP. I'm a little curious about a few things. For starters the RP took place right after another RP I did so I'm curious as to how well that played out. Yeah I know the results of the match but I'm still curious because truth be told my next RP may do something similar... *pending if I'm booked next card or not*
And there's the fact that the first scene was nothing but narrative minus at the beginning (which was more a 'previously' type thing) and towards the end. So wondering if that's more ok or what not.
If you read the 2nd linked RP.. first off let me know what you thought of that one too And then let me know if you read it before or after the LAW one because I'm curious if it synced up well and if the RP did better after you read that one before it.
EDIT: Yes the links are to my archives. But I've just started doing off site posting for LAW recently.
Last Edit: Nov 7, 2017 1:49:47 GMT -5 by Maya Jensen
Post by Roxy Cotton on Nov 8, 2017 10:48:46 GMT -5
I'm gonna be honest and say I didn't read it much. I looked at it and enjoyed the bits of it that I did check out, but the website layout was way too busy for me and made it really difficult to read IMO.
That's just my own personal take obviously, and it may be fine for others, but that was my biggest focus.
Post by Maya Jensen on Nov 8, 2017 23:59:40 GMT -5
it is? huh. could you screen shot it cuz it looks fine on my end, and haven't had any issues with it from anyone before. (minus an off-site RP complaint.)
Post by Milisandre Crowthorne on Nov 9, 2017 1:46:59 GMT -5
That is what your layout looks like to me. I went to read it when you posted it and when I saw that I closed the tab cause there was no way I was gonna read it in that layout
I don't get it. I mean it's not that condensed or anything. And the paragraphs are only like 3/4ths the link of the paragraphs on here. So I don't see what the problem is.
The text isn't any smaller. Just how long the sentence goes across across the page. Though actually, the text is a bit bigger so that would mean it's easier to read. But is scrolling in the layout a problem? Cuz if it's causing an issue just hover the mouse over the area when you scroll or click it once or twice and it'll scroll there.
If using a touch screen just place your finger in the area to scroll.
Didn't mean for that last one to sound like a complaint or anything. I just don't understand the issue with the layout. Since I've never had anyone complain about it before. In fact I've been using that style of layout for years. (same structure/size different pics).
Post by Samantha Tolson on Nov 9, 2017 4:19:13 GMT -5
I've never been a fan of gimmicky layouts and things like that. To me, personally, it just feels like using them means that as a writer, you don't trust your writing to do what it is intended to do. I think that far too often, a lot of people worry about how a piece looks, instead of what a piece says. The sad thing is that in a lot of places I've read around, that sort of thing scores points with whoever is doing the judging. (Not saying that's what's happening with Jeremy, because I know better, just the overall landscape observation.) That, and putting your RP off-site is also a distraction to me. When I click on the title of an RP, I want to be able to read that RP, not get directed to another site to read it, then additionally, deal with the layout, etc. It feels like it's all being over-produced.
Then again, I'm kind of an old-school type. But I'm like Mili...I saw the layout and just pretty much shut down.
I use a layout because I like the design and I just think it looks awesome. It has nothing to do with me not thinking my RP itself isn't good enough. I just like the way it looks as I'm a designer and I like using things I've designed.
I know that there are people who dislike clicking off for a RP. I personally am not against it unless said link is dead But the only reason I'm doing it is because I've been storing all of my RPs on my archives and it's a pain to have to recode the RP just to put it on there... and my layout doesn't work for these boards anyways.
Post by Roxy Cotton on Nov 9, 2017 13:38:25 GMT -5
I have nothing against clicking offsite to read a RP. I have seen plenty like that that were awesome and that the layouts added an element to the character as a whole.
This though is just cramped and uncomfortable to the eye.
Post by Maya Jensen on Nov 10, 2017 3:54:13 GMT -5
Again how is it cramped? the words are slightly bigger than on here and the length of the lines is just a little smaller than on here. like 3/4ths the length.
Reason why I don't get it, is because I've never had anyone have that issue with it. And I've been using it for a good 3-4 years.
Post by Milisandre Crowthorne on Nov 10, 2017 15:10:24 GMT -5
its a lot smaller than just 3/4 the length. I copied part and viewed it in the forums and 1 sentence on your layout went over 3 lines where it and part of another were on 1 line here. so yeah its kinda cramped on your layout.
Post by Maya Jensen on Nov 10, 2017 18:34:38 GMT -5
Probably about the size of a phone or something. But it's not really cramped so again I don't get it. But *shrug* just annoying that you guys won't even read the RPs but w/e I guess. I'll just wait for someone who will then :/
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